I like it. It's hard to criticize what isn't there, since it's as short as it is and you can't expect everything and the kitchen sink to be covered. I would add, though, that one thing not really mentioned, but which I think a lot of Orthodox could benefit from, is western talk of blood. Blood is all over the New Testament, yet in much of Orthodox literature we find very little about it--certainly theologically and substantially, though it might get a token reference because of it's Scriptural pervasiveness. I'm not saying Orthodox (or Catholics) are wrong for focusing on things like theosis, or the theotokos, as it relates to the history and ongoing redeeming of the world, but balance is good too. There was a debt to be paid, he was the spotless lamb (self-)offered and slaughtered, there is 'power in the blood,' etc. This blurb seems to me to have a good balance like that--to me anyway--a good tone in something pointing out problems/errors.